The points you make are fine, but the whole essay lacks coherence.
你提出的论点很好，但整篇文章缺乏呼应连贯。
1.【光】相干性,相参性;【物】同调;【化】内聚力;内聚现象
2.统一,首尾一贯;一致性
3.紧密的结合,凝聚
1.the state of being coherent
2.the feeling that you have the same beliefs or purpose as other people in a group
1.coherence: being (of ideas, thoughts, speech, reasoning, etc) connected logically or consistently; easy to understand; clear.
连贯性，一致性。可以理解为观念、思想、言论、推理合乎逻辑；前后一致；让人易懂。
2.This book is a systematic treatment of one of these fields--the broad area that deals with the coherence and fluctuation of light.
这本书是有系统的对这些领域之一的处理--处理光的连贯性和波动的辽阔的地区。
3.He found that in his models (as well as in real life) very few systems were able to self-organize into any kind of lasting coherence.
他发现，在他的模型中（和现实生活中一样）很少有系统能自组织形成任何一种可持久的连贯一致性。
4.The Brics (Brazil, Russia, India and China) were angry enough to make a fuss, but did not have the coherence to agree on a standard-bearer.
金砖四国（巴西、俄罗斯、印度和中国）相当恼火，怨声载道，但却未能在谁来为IMF掌舵的问题上达成一致意见。
5.Operation of the method was easy, and the result was in coherence with that of similar thin-film from relevant papers.
实验表明，该方法简便易行，所得数据与文献中同类薄膜的测量数据基本符合。
6.This solves the problems of multiple cores trying to modify the same location in memory and of cache coherence.
因此，多个核心修改同一位置数据和高速缓存一致性的问题迎刃而解。
7.During the delivery of information, it has values of economy, coherence and shift of information focus, to name only a few.
在信息的传递中，语用预设发挥了简洁性，连贯性和焦点转移等作用；
8.Learning objects have gone through their own profusion of standards, but a good deal of effort has gone into coordination and coherence.
学习对象也经历了自身的标准纷争，但大部分研究已经逐渐走向协调和一致。
9.The pathological changes of the parotid duct with SS has coherence in broad sense and has no coherence in narrow sense.
SS患者腮腺导管病变存在广义的一致性和狭义的不一致性。
10.the second, trying to preserve the coherence of statistical properties before and after embedding data.
通过分析试图保持消息嵌入前后各种统计量统计分布的一致性。